Sorry to be frank. The handout is boring. I worked with investment bank pitch books for many years. The rule is that you have only one minute of people's time. Think bullet points. Most of the present language can be culled. Use one easily discernible graphic in the heading with a simpler title.
I very much appreciate your work that is critical to our survival. Please know that I deliver this critique with all respect.
For most people - it's a lot of reading.
Bullet points under main headers would make it easier to scan/read and grasp main points.
Sorry to be frank. The handout is boring. I worked with investment bank pitch books for many years. The rule is that you have only one minute of people's time. Think bullet points. Most of the present language can be culled. Use one easily discernible graphic in the heading with a simpler title.
I very much appreciate your work that is critical to our survival. Please know that I deliver this critique with all respect.